A couple of days ago I sent Laura the crit I did. She revised her query and sent it back to me, and...it's looking good!
So now Laura and I would LOVE to get your opinion on the new version.
You don't need to be an expert to have an opinion. And don't be a stranger to the tweet button at the bottom of this post - we want this thing so polished no agent out there can resist!
Farrah knows she is not human even if she looks it. She is a biologically manufactured soldier, who, by the age of seventeen has killed several people, knows how to drive a tank and could effortlessly outrun a grown man. Farrah also knows she's not supposed to have emotions or think for herself, and yet she does.
Having escaped the grey and bloodred life at Ares Industries Farrah hides in the small town of Riverfront, where she finds herself an ally in Sage Foster, a young astronomer. Even with her new identity as Sage’s stepsister, keeping a low profile isn’t easy. After all, putting a bullet in someone’s head is not a solution at the local high school.
Slowly, and with the help of three friends and a boy who might understand her better than anyone else, she learns there's more to being human than acting like one. But Farrah can’t concentrate on becoming normal when operatives from Ares Industries, who want their expensive project back, are closing in on her. Having touched many lives, Farrah has more to keep safe than her identity and her newly discovered freedom.
BEING HUMAN is an urban science fiction novel for young adults, complete at 78,000 words. It is well able to stand alone but has series potential.
Thank you for your time and consideration.